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#1,552
YankeeVol said:
You do you "boo". :cool:

Grammatically, the sentence is problematic—but not entirely incoherent. Here's a breakdown of its main grammar issues, alongside the informal or dialectal elements that contribute to its rough tone and lack of clarity:

Original Quote:
"Okay yankee, so the south is stupid and ya'll are fixing to elect a straight up commie terrorist mayor of NYC and don't even get me started on Minnesota and California. There is a reason all those stupid yankees are moving here. I could write a dagum book about the stupid yankees I have run across in the past five years."

1. Capitalization Errors
“yankee” and “the south” should be capitalized:
✅ “Yankee”, “the South” (proper nouns/regions)

2. Contractions & Informality
“ya'll” is a misspelling. Correct contraction:
✅ “y’all” (short for you all)
❌ “ya'll” is incorrect—apostrophe placement is off.

3. Run-on Sentences
The first sentence runs several ideas together with no punctuation or clarity breaks.

Suggestion: break it up into shorter, clearer sentences or use semicolons/commas properly.

4. Ambiguity & Lack of Parallel Structure
“...and don't even get me started on Minnesota and California.”

Who is the subject of “don’t”? It's a sentence fragment.

Needs rephrasing or clear subject for clarity.

5. Repetitive/Redundant Language
Repeating “stupid yankees” three times adds redundancy and makes the writing sound emotional rather than reasoned.

Summary of Grammar Rating:
Category Evaluation
Capitalization ❌ Incorrect for proper nouns
Punctuation ❌ Missing clarity breaks
Contractions ❌ “ya’ll” is incorrect
Sentence structure ❌ Run-ons and fragments
Clarity/Coherence ⚠️ Understandable but disjointed
Spelling/Word choice ⚠️ Informal slang (“dagum”)

Overall Grade (Grammar-Only): D+ / C-
If written in a more structured, grammatically correct way—but still emotionally charged—it might still be inappropriate, but at least clearer. Would you like me to revise it for grammar only, or reframe it into a respectful, constructive message?


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I understand the intricacies of quantum physics and calculus. My momma had a master's degree in English and I caused her much consternation, so I understand. I am willing to cut heads on most any topic besides English.
 
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#1,553
#1,553
YankeeVol said:
You do you "boo". :cool:

Grammatically, the sentence is problematic—but not entirely incoherent. Here's a breakdown of its main grammar issues, alongside the informal or dialectal elements that contribute to its rough tone and lack of clarity:

Original Quote:
"Okay yankee, so the south is stupid and ya'll are fixing to elect a straight up commie terrorist mayor of NYC and don't even get me started on Minnesota and California. There is a reason all those stupid yankees are moving here. I could write a dagum book about the stupid yankees I have run across in the past five years."

1. Capitalization Errors
“yankee” and “the south” should be capitalized:
✅ “Yankee”, “the South” (proper nouns/regions)

2. Contractions & Informality
“ya'll” is a misspelling. Correct contraction:
✅ “y’all” (short for you all)
❌ “ya'll” is incorrect—apostrophe placement is off.

3. Run-on Sentences
The first sentence runs several ideas together with no punctuation or clarity breaks.

Suggestion: break it up into shorter, clearer sentences or use semicolons/commas properly.

4. Ambiguity & Lack of Parallel Structure
“...and don't even get me started on Minnesota and California.”

Who is the subject of “don’t”? It's a sentence fragment.

Needs rephrasing or clear subject for clarity.

5. Repetitive/Redundant Language
Repeating “stupid yankees” three times adds redundancy and makes the writing sound emotional rather than reasoned.

Summary of Grammar Rating:
Category Evaluation
Capitalization ❌ Incorrect for proper nouns
Punctuation ❌ Missing clarity breaks
Contractions ❌ “ya’ll” is incorrect
Sentence structure ❌ Run-ons and fragments
Clarity/Coherence ⚠️ Understandable but disjointed
Spelling/Word choice ⚠️ Informal slang (“dagum”)

Overall Grade (Grammar-Only): D+ / C-
If written in a more structured, grammatically correct way—but still emotionally charged—it might still be inappropriate, but at least clearer. Would you like me to revise it for grammar only, or reframe it into a respectful, constructive message?


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TL; DR

But did you tell everyone that not only are you a yankee, but you've changed allegiances to LSU as well?
 
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